【深圳福田小学一对一家教怎么找反馈好吗？】高考英语作文赏析

文章讨论了许多年轻人很在意自己外貌的问题，文章的最后指出：“ We need to judge people by what they do, not what they look like.” 你同意文章最后提出的观点吗?对此观点你有何看法?请根据下面提示写一篇英语短文谈谈你的看法，阐述理由，并举例说明。

写作要点:

I. Your opinion (agree/ disagree /…);  

2. Reasons (looks, personality品性, ability …);   

3. An example (yourself/ a person around you/ a famous person/…).

要求:

1.短文应包括提示中所有的写作要点，条理清楚，行文连贯，可适当发挥;

2.如举自己或身边的人作为例子，不能出现真实的人名和地名;

3.词数不少于80。---【深圳福田小学一对一家教怎么找反馈好吗？】

满分作文1：

I agree with the opinion. Compared with looks, personality and ability are more important. Because we can’t change our looks easily, but we can decide and control what we do. Thnaks to the kind and hard-working people, our society is becoming better and better.  

For example, Ma Yun, a well-known businessman, doesn’t look handsome, but he created Alibaba which has changed our lifestyle and made our life more convenient. He has been doing so much for our society that we all admire him. Because of his contribution to our society, we even think he looks so cool.  

So let’s try our best to do more useful things for our society and pay less attentionto our looks. ---【深圳福田小学一对一家教怎么找反馈好吗？】

满分作文2：

In my opinion, I think we need to judge people by both what they do and what they look like.

A person's personality and ability are very important, but for some jobs, looks are also important, such as an actor or an actress, a waiter or a waitress, or even a teacher Because it's enjoyable to see a good-looking person

For example, my teachers in my class all teach very well, and they are kind and helpful. All of us like them. But the most popular teacher is my English teacher, because she looks really beautiful. She dresses herself up every day and always has a smile on her face

So let's try our best to improve our ability, personality and looks.   ---【深圳福田小学一对一家教怎么找反馈好吗？】

假如你有机会和任何一个名人共进午餐。请根据以下要点和要求用英语写一篇短文。

1.要点：

1）这个名人是谁；

2） 你为什么想和他或她共进午餐；

3） 你想和他或她谈论什么。

2.要求：

1）文中不得出现真实姓名和学校名称；

2）词数80左右。---【深圳福田小学一对一家教怎么找反馈好吗？】

满分作文：

I’d like to have lunch with Ren Zhengfei, the founder of the well-known Chinese tech company Huawei.

Mr. Ren is considered as a great man who always has everything mapped out ahead. And under his leadership, Huawei has become a high-tech giant worldwide. Over the lunch, I will listen to his success story. Then I will ask him what is important to make it happen. If time permits, I’ll ask for his advice for us teenagers today.

I’m expecting this lunch already.

从下面两个题目中任选一题，根据中文和英文提示，完成一篇不少于50词的文段写作。文中已给出内容不计入总词数。所给提示词语仅供选用。请不要写出你的校名和姓名。

题目①---【深圳福田小学一对一家教怎么找反馈好吗？】

假如你是李华,你们学校正在开展“安全月”宣传活动，倡议大家制作关于安全教育的主题海报，你们班交换生Peter给你发邮件询问相关事情。请用英语回复一封邮件，告诉他海报上交的时间，并分享你设计海报的一些想法。

提示词语:

design，safety rule，careful，protect，picture

提示问题:

When should you hand in the poster?

What would you like to share with Peter about designing the poster?

Dear Peter,

I'm glad to receive your email   .

If there is anything more that I can help with, please let me know.

Yours,

Li   Hua

满分作文：

Dear Peter,

I'm glad to receive your email. As it is required，you are supposed to hand in the poster before next Friday.

Being your close friend，I am extremely willing to share some ideas about designing the poster with you.First and foremost，the basic safety rules are of great importance，which should be included in your poster.In the second place，following the safety rules is so meaningful and crucial that you had better remind your readers of its significance and advise them to be careful both in and out of school.Last but by no means least，if I were you，I would add a few suggestions about safety awareness，considering that better safe than sorry.In addition，it is a good idea for you to draw a few pictures on your poster so as to make it more lively and acceptable.

If there is anything more that I can help with, please let me know.---【深圳福田小学一对一家教怎么找反馈好吗？】

Yours,

Li   Hua

40.题目2

自律，即自我约束，是自我提升的一种途径，有助于我们成长，促使我们不断前行。

某英文网站正在开展以“自律”为主题的征文活动。假如你是李华，请用英语写一篇短文投稿，谈谈为了增强自律意识，你做过什么，以及这样做给你带来的好处。

提示词语:

self-disciplined(自律的)，plan，goal，habit，improve

提示问题:

What did you do to be self-disciplined?

What benefits have you got from doing so?

Self-discipline plays an important role in our life .---【深圳福田小学一对一家教怎么找反馈好吗？】

满分作文：

Self-discipline plays an important role in our life. To be honest, I am a person who is self-disciplined. I used to follow all kinds of rules and hand in the tasks appointed on time at school. And I could not only respected all my teachers but also get on well with my classmates. At home, I was able to balance housework and homework. I usually made a plan in advance to make it easier to achieve my goal. After finishing all the task, I developed the habit of going to bed early and going to bed early. In the society，I spared no effort to improve myself all the time.---【深圳福田小学一对一家教怎么找反馈好吗？】

In a word. I have benefited a lot from being self-discipline. First of all, I have had many good habits, which makes my life easier and more regular. Secondly, my life and my study have been to high efficiency so that a lot of time has been saved. Thirdly, being self-disciplined has prepared me for a better and brighter future. In the future, I will continue to be a self-disciplined person.